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You are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend, -Asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need -Saying why you need them -Making arrangements to meet

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Dear Julia Thanks for your
last
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 letter. It is nice to hear from you after
such
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 a long time. I'm pretty good in spite of working hard. I heard
about
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that
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 you are coming to
this
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 city.
Additionally
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,the photos you send me of our holiday are brilliant. I would be grateful if you
carry
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gave me
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 some specific prizes
to
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apply
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me
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like some photos that
in
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are in
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 my room and some dairy products like milk and
egg
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eggs
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. These items are significant for me.
Since the
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 photos in my room are taken in my childhood with my family. I'm going to share these pictures
to
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with
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 my friends to introduce myself nearer.
Actually
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Actually,
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 I miss our fresh products that my mother prepared in the same way as I am going to introduce our local dairy products to my new friends.If you desire l can
great
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greet
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 you in the station. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 you will be grateful to come
my
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 home. Since I am going to share my spacious room. If you want to know anything else,just get in touch with me as soon as possible. Best wishes Zinnura
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structure
Make sure that your email is well-organized and each paragraph serves a clear purpose. Your introduction and conclusion are nicely done, but the main body of the email could be more clearly structured around each of the points mentioned in the prompt.
paragraphing
Consider using more paragraphing to clearly separate your ideas. This will help to improve the coherence and cohesion of your email.
conciseness
Try to avoid repetitions and be more concise in your expressions. This will add to the clarity and effectiveness of your writing.
vocabulary & sentence complexity
Use a wider range of vocabulary and more complex sentence structures to convey your points more precisely and to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
task response
You have provided a clear response to all parts of the task, ensuring you have asked for items from home, explained why you need them, and made arrangements to meet. Well done!
tone
You've successfully conveyed warmth and friendliness, making the email engaging and personal.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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