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The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011

The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011
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The graph illustrates the changes in the proportions of the five main industries including Manufacturing,
Services
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, Agriculture or Fishing, Construction and Energy in 1841 and 2011.
Overall
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, more than half of the given industries experienced a decline, except for
Services
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 and Construction. What stands out is that the dominant
industry
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 shifted from Manufacturing to
Services
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. It is revealed from the chart that Manufacturing was the most prevalent
industry
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 in the middle of the 19th century, accounting for 36% of the workforce.
While
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Services
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 followed closely behind at 33%, making it the second most popular
industry
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, Construction and Energy lagged behind with only 5% and 3% respectively.
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, there was a significant transformation in
industry
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 distribution by the early decade of the
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 century.
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Services
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The services
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 sector attracted the majority of the workforce in
UK
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the UK
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, reaching 81%,
whereas
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 Manufacturing decreased by 22%.
Additionally
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,
Agricultural
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the Agricultural
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 Section became the least favored
industry
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 with
the
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a
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 proportion was around 1%, equivalent to
Energy
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the Energy
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 Section.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agrarian society
  • modernization
  • technological advancements
  • deindustrialization
  • Industrial Revolution
  • workforce shift
  • service sectors
  • knowledge-based economy
  • labor-intensive
  • information technology
  • healthcare sectors
  • manufacturing decline
  • workforce percentages
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