The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts the
number
of people in millions
who visited four international museums from 1980 to 2015. These museums are named as Louvre, London Science Museum
, Vatican Museum
and Shenzhen Museum
. Overall
, the number
of visitors increased significantally
in Correct your spelling
significantly
Vatican
Correct article usage
the Vatican
Museum
and decreased gradually in London
Science Correct article usage
the London
Museum
.
The number
of individuals who visited Vatican
Correct article usage
the Vatican
Museum
in 1980 was around five million which was
doubled rapidly over the period of 35 years. Unnecessary verb
apply
And the
Correct word choice
The
number
for
the Louvre Change preposition
of
museum
was approximately 8 Capitalize word
Museum
millions
in 1980 which was Change to singular
million
highest
in Correct article usage
the highest
compare
with other museums and the visitors rose gradually there, around 10 Replace the word
comparison
millions
Change to singular
million
till
2015.
Visitors Change preposition
by
for
Shenzhen Change preposition
to
Museum
was
almost Correct subject-verb agreement
were
same
as seen in 1980 and 2015. Correct article usage
the same
However
, in London Science Museum
the number
of peoples
who visited it Fix the agreement mistake
people
was
decreased steadily from 1980 to 2015, that was 4 Unnecessary verb
apply
millions
in 1980 Change to singular
million
whereas
only 2 millions
Change to singular
million
was
seen in 2015.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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