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The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004 Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004 Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above illustrates the maximum
number
 of
elephants
 in 9
countries
 in Asia in 1997 and 2004.
While
 Vietnam, Sri Lanka, Cambodia,
Laos
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and Laos
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 had a quietly small change in
elephant
 population in two years, the
number
 of
elephants
 declined significantly in
other
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the other
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 5
countries
, which
is
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are
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 India, Malaysia, Myanmar, Thailand and China. China had the smallest
number
 of
elephants
 and
in contrast
, India had the most. There are 4
countries
 that have the quietly same trend about
elephant
 population. Of the 4
countries
, only Cambodia had more
elephants
 in 2004 than in 1997. Vietnam, Sri Lanka,
Laos
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and Laos
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 all decreased
a
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the
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 marginal
number
 of
elephants
. Vietnam ended up in 2004 with less than 1000
elephants
,
while
 Sri Lanka had the largest
elephant
 population in 2004, which is nearly 3000
elephants
. It could be seen that in
other
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the other
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 5
countries
, the
number
 of
elephants
 had a clear downward trend. The biggest fall happened in India and Thailand, with a change of nearly 3000
elephants
.
Although
 each
countries
 have differences in
a
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the
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 drop in
elephant
number
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numbers
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, the country that had
a
Change the article
the
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 largest proportion of
elephants
 still had their place in 2004, and the country that had
least
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the least
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elephants
 still had their place in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, elephants, countries, elephant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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