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A Australian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

#australian #friend #post #-say #-describe #-explain
Hello Abby, I have received your gift today. Thank you so much for the lovely necklace set you have sent as my birthday present. When I received it, I was awestruck because I was not expecting
this
 and yet it is here. I love the color of the necklace which is rose gold. It is perfect for my night dinner dress with my husband. I
was
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have been
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 looking for
this
color
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colour
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from
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for
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 quite a
while
 but it is always out of stock and I was so annoyed
from
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by
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this
. I will be putting
this
 on today on our dinner date as it is a perfect match with my outfit. I am so lucky you have you as my friend. Thanks a lot for
this
 lovely gift. You are my bosom buddy.
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Task Achievement
Consider expanding your description of the present to include more details. This can help make your thanks feel more personal and heartfelt.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to use a variety of sentence structures to make your letter more engaging.
Task Achievement
You expressed gratitude effectively.
Task Achievement
Your enthusiasm and how you plan to use the present were clearly communicated.
Coherence & Cohesion
You structured your letter well, making it easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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