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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The provided diagram describes the supplying process of
water
, which is used and will be used in the future, in Australia.
Overall
, we can see that the diagram
take
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takes
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 into consideration three different types of
water
, which are pure
water
,
storm
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stormwater
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water
 and
watse
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water
water
.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, it divides the path
in
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 four main categories, which include Dam/Storage, Household factories shops and city,
water
treatment
plant
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plants
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 and
river
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rivers
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. More detailed, it can be noticed that the supplying process
start
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starts
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 from Dam/storage, from where
watse
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the
water
 is transported to the
water
treatment
plan
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plant
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,
while
 pure
water
 is supplied to people in Household, shops and so on. After having
being
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 utilized
from
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 people,
watse
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waste
water
 is carried to the
water
treatment
plan
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plant
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,
while
storm
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stormwater
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water
reach
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 the river. Keeping in mind the previous considerations, the diagram indicates that
watse
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waste
water
 is always transported to the
water
treatment
plan
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plant
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,
storm
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stormwater
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water
 to the river and pure
water
 to the population.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, watse, treatment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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