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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The provided diagram describes the supplying process of
water
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, which is used and will be used in the future, in Australia.
Overall
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, we can see that the diagram
take
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 into consideration three different types of
water
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, which are pure
water
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,
storm
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stormwater
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water
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 and
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watse
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water
water
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.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, it divides the path
in
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 four main categories, which include Dam/Storage, Household factories shops and city,
water
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treatment
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plant
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plants
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 and
river
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rivers
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. More detailed, it can be noticed that the supplying process
start
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starts
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 from Dam/storage, from where
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watse
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the
water
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 is transported to the
water
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treatment
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plan
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plant
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,
while
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 pure
water
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 is supplied to people in Household, shops and so on. After having
being
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been
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 utilized
from
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by
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 people,
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watse
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waste
water
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 is carried to the
water
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treatment
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plan
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plant
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,
while
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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reach
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 the river. Keeping in mind the previous considerations, the diagram indicates that
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watse
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waste
water
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 is always transported to the
water
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treatment
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plan
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plant
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,
storm
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stormwater
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water
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 to the river and pure
water
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 to the population.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, watse, treatment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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