The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004
The chart below shows three different age groups of people and how much
money
they spend on three different things, such
as food and drinks, restaurants and hotels and entertainment
. Overall
, the most common category
they spend money
for,
is food and drinks.
First of all, when we talk about Restaurants and Hotels, the group of age under 30 Remove the comma
apply
years
old spend the most money
on that, and less on Entertainment
. From 31 till 60, money
spent on Restaurants and hotels are
exactly the same, around 12 per Correct subject-verb agreement
is
cent
, but after 60 years
old, people spend below 5 per cent
and approximately 7 per cent
after 76 years
old.
Secondly
, Food and drinks from just above 5 per cent
at
the under 30 Change preposition
in
years
old category
, following an upward trend and at every single category
of age after 30, the percentage is
increased, more than 20 per Unnecessary verb
apply
cent
between 46 and 75 years
old category
, and over 20 per cent
at 76 plus. Moving forward to entertainment
, is also
following an upward trend, starts
from approximately 6 per Wrong verb form
starting
cent
under 30 years
old category
, and reached
the peak at Wrong verb form
reaching
61
-75 Correct article usage
the 61
years
old category
, which is more than 20 per cent
, after 76 years
old, the entertainment
suffer
a decline and is just between 10 and 15 per Change the verb form
suffers
cent
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