The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004
The chart below shows three different age groups of people and how much
money
they spend on three different things,
such
as food and drinks, restaurants and hotels and
entertainment
.
Overall
, the most common
category
they spend
money
for
,
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is food and drinks. First of all, when we talk about Restaurants and Hotels, the group of age under 30
years
old spend the most
money
on that, and less on
Entertainment
. From 31 till 60,
money
spent on Restaurants and hotels
are
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is
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exactly the same, around 12 per
cent
, but after 60
years
old, people spend below 5 per
cent
and approximately 7 per
cent
after 76
years
old.
Secondly
, Food and drinks from just above 5 per
cent
at
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in
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the under 30
years
old
category
, following an upward trend and at every single
category
of age after 30, the percentage
is
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increased, more than 20 per
cent
between 46 and 75
years
old
category
, and over 20 per
cent
at 76 plus. Moving forward to
entertainment
, is
also
following an upward trend,
starts
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starting
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from approximately 6 per
cent
under 30
years
old
category
, and
reached
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reaching
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the peak at
61
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the 61
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-75
years
old
category
, which is more than 20 per
cent
, after 76
years
old, the
entertainment
suffer
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suffers
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a decline and is just between 10 and 15 per
cent
.
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