The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. THe second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which ressult from this energy use.

The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. THe second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which ressult from this energy use.
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The pie chart demonstrates the
energy
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use in the Australian household and the
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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produced in different ways. The most important form of
energy
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consumption
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is the heating process, with 72% of
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consumption
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attributed to
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way. The general heating process and water heating account for 42% and 30% respectively,
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refrigeration
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is about 7 %.It is followed by another two causes, lighting and cooling, contributing to 4% and 2% respectively. The remaining 15% is caused by other appliances. We can see from the second graph that the amount of
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gas
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emissions
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produced by each method doesn't depend on its
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consumption
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.Water heating is responsible for 32% of
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gas
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emissions
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,accounting for the largest share of
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. The second biggest producer of
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emissions
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is "other appliances", contributing to 28%,which is about the same as the
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of general heating and refrigerators combined.
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, lighting and cooling emit minimal amounts, with 11% of
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emissions
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in total.
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,
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general heating uses the most
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,it emits relatively little
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gas
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.
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