Some people think that all lawbreakers should be taken into prison. In contrast, others believe there are better alternatives (for example, doing work or learning skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the third millennium, it might be conceded that the approcahes to the punishments and consequences againt the law tend to be fundamentally different. The openion about an appropriate action divided as to whether all
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psychologists indicate that a
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human work
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outcome of their guilties, might be profitable for units and people.
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to the public. On the
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the role of lock-up in
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system. Clearly, the burden of responsibility
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discipline
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lies in the hands of prisons. Needless to say, one factor which has led to
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order in a city, providing
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and structure, is a strict and dreadful consequence like going to jail.
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granting
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of residents. Obviously, as many offenders are isolated far from the urban areas people can be safe and secure.
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in cells anymore. In sum
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it can be stated that
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prison as a strict consequence
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obedient
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in society.
Nevertheless
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of prison other moderate consequences can
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obviate
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possibility of crime and supply human
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task achievement
Ensure your essay includes a clear stance in the introduction to directly address the essay question. This helps to guide the reader through your discussion.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Violate
  • Societal norms
  • Public safety
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Reintegrate
  • Justice system
  • Punishment
  • Community service
  • Skills training
  • Social problems
  • Reform
  • Exacerbate
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