The diagrams below represent the modifications that have occured at Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960.

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The given maps depict the changes in the layout of Queen Mary Hospital in three different stages 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Overall

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, Queen Mary Hospital was improved with the installation of a number

services

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of services

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and facilities, with some areas converted for other purposes.

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with, in 1960,

hospital

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a hospital

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was built close to

main

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the main

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road and next to

shopping

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the shopping

a shopping

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centre

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. The area behind

hospital

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the hospital

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was facilitated for

car

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a car

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park which was next to

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apply

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farmland. In 1980, the hospital and car park both stood still

while

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the shopping

centre

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was converted into medical areas including a pharmacy and a cancer

centre

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Next,

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the farmland was demolished and replaced by a nursing school. In 2000, the hospital remained unchanged

while

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the car park was reduced in size. The nursing school decreased in size and moved to behind the hospital.

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, the cancer

centre

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was enlarged

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the area of

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the previous

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nursing school.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

151 words

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