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The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa subscribing to mobile and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa subscribing to mobile and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The
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 chart provides information about how much
Africa
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 residents used mobile and
fixed
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fixed-line
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phones
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 between 1994 and 2004.
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, there was an increase in the percentage of people using mobile and
fixed
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line
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phones
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, with a sharp growth being seen in the use of mobile
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.
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, the share of habitants subscribing to mobile surpassed that of using
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phones
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 in 2001. At the beginning of the period, the proportion of residents in Africa subscribed to fixed services started at 1,7%, after which it saw a rise to just under 3%. The figure
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 mobile services saw similar changes in the first two years, followed by a noticeable dramatic growth of 3% in 2001, overtaking that for fixed residential phone services. Only about 3,1% of habitants used fixed
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phones
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 in 2004. Meanwhile, the share of mobile
phones
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 reached a peak of 8,8%
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 end
the
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 period.

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