The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now,  and plans for its development.
The given blueprints below depict the current and future layout of Islip town
centre
. As observed from the maps, there are some major changes,
such
as the establishment of new housing, bus station, shopping
centre
, car
park
, and dual carriageway. The main
road
would
also
got
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replaced by
pedestarians
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pedestrians
pedestrian
only footpath. Looking more into details, the north shops got replaced by bus station, shopping
centre
, car
park
, and new housing, from west to east respectively. The main
road
functionality would
also
change, the proposed design change it into
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a pedestarians
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pedestarians
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pedestrians
pedestrian
only
road
.
Lastly
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there is a new housing between housing across from the school and the
park
. The most notable difference is the construction of
dual
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a dual
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carriageway around
town
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the town
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centre
for vehicle access
of
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Islip town
centre
,
this
replace
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the countryside on the north side and
also
use
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some
south east
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southeast
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park
space. The new housing
also
have
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road
access into
dual
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a dual
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carriageway.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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