The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

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The given blueprints below depict the current and future layout of Islip town

centre

. As observed from the maps, there are some major changes,

such

as the establishment of new housing, bus station, shopping

centre

, car

park

, and dual carriageway. The main

road

would

also

got

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replaced by

pedestarians

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pedestrians

pedestrian

only footpath. Looking more into details, the north shops got replaced by bus station, shopping

centre

, car

park

, and new housing, from west to east respectively. The main

road

functionality would

also

change, the proposed design change it into

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a pedestarians

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pedestarians

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pedestrians

pedestrian

only

road

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there is a new housing between housing across from the school and the

park

. The most notable difference is the construction of

dual

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a dual

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carriageway around

town

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the town

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centre

for vehicle access

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Islip town

centre

this

replace

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the countryside on the north side and

also

use

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uses

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some

south east

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southeast

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park

space. The new housing

also

have

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has

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road

access into

dual

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a dual

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carriageway.

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