Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In these modern days, it is quite common that we have a lot of options.
I’m fully agree
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I fully agree
this
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I will discuss the reasons and supporting Add a comma
essay,
evidences
from my experiences.
First and foremost, the Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
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advancement
of technology enables us to explore and learn more things. There are two categories of fields
of exploration it unlocks, the expansion of new fields
and more complex advancement
of the earlier fields
. Example
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for
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fields
are often related to art topics. For example
for the expansion is previously computer is such
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advancement
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computers
of
optimization, emerge Change preposition
for
a
new majors, Correct article usage
apply
such
as artificial intelligence, software infrastructure, cloud computing and others.
Furthermore
, it seems the number of our lifestyle choices are
increasing. Nowadays, for job Correct subject-verb agreement
is
arrangement
, we have the option to work from Fix the agreement mistake
arrangements
office
and work from home or even anywhere, because of the Add an article
the office
an office
technology
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technological
advancement
. The amount of our dietary options are
expanding too. Now, we can be vegetarian or even vegan easier. There are a lot of Change the verb form
is
replacement
for milk, egg, cheese, or even meat developed by the food scientist. Fix the agreement mistake
replacements
Lastly
, we have more entertainment alternatives too. We have a lot of new sports, video games, movies, or
media entertainment related to virtual reality.
In conclusion, Correct word choice
and
I’m completely agree
that nowadays the options are plentiful. Change the verb form
I completely agree
This
occured
because of the Correct your spelling
occurred
occurs
advancement
of technology, and it surely help
us as a human to be who we want Change the verb form
helps
easier
.Correct word choice
more easily
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Work on varying your sentence structures to enhance readability and interest.
task achievement
Consider offering a more diverse range of examples from your own experience or more detailed scenarios to truly enrich your argument.
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Be mindful of small grammatical errors and typo ('I’m fully agree' should be 'I fully agree'). Minor mistakes can detract from the overall professionalism of the piece.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a clear thesis statement and followed it with logically structured paragraphs, which is fantastic for both coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Your essay does a commendable job at touching upon the multifaceted aspects of the topic. The examples from technology, lifestyle, and entertainment enrich your argument and demonstrate a broad understanding of the subject matter.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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