Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In these modern days, it is quite common that we have a lot of options.
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from my experiences. First and foremost, the
advancement
of technology enables us to explore and learn more things. There are two categories of
fields
of exploration it unlocks, the expansion of new
fields
and more complex
advancement
of the earlier
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emerging of new
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a rare equipment and the majors related to it only computer science, but now
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the
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optimization, emerge
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new majors,
such
as artificial intelligence, software infrastructure, cloud computing and others.
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, it seems the number of our lifestyle choices
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increasing. Nowadays, for job
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, we have the option to work from
office
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and work from home or even anywhere, because of the
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advancement
. The amount of our dietary options
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expanding too. Now, we can be vegetarian or even vegan easier. There are a lot of
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for milk, egg, cheese, or even meat developed by the food scientist.
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, we have more entertainment alternatives too. We have a lot of new sports, video games, movies,
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media entertainment related to virtual reality. In conclusion,
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that nowadays the options are plentiful.
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us as a human to be who we want
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coherence cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structures to enhance readability and interest.
task achievement
Consider offering a more diverse range of examples from your own experience or more detailed scenarios to truly enrich your argument.
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Be mindful of small grammatical errors and typo ('I’m fully agree' should be 'I fully agree'). Minor mistakes can detract from the overall professionalism of the piece.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a clear thesis statement and followed it with logically structured paragraphs, which is fantastic for both coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Your essay does a commendable job at touching upon the multifaceted aspects of the topic. The examples from technology, lifestyle, and entertainment enrich your argument and demonstrate a broad understanding of the subject matter.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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