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Public transport is essential but problematic. Describe some of problems connected to public transport and suggest some solutions.

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Many public transportation systems are available these days, which
people
 choose
according to
 their convenience. By using public transport, a lot of
issues
 occurred. I will explain the
issues
 and solutions in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are a plethora of
issues
while
 using public transportation.
Firstly
, cleanliness
issues
 are most common, we see in buses or trains where
people
 eat and throw remaining stuff inside the vehicles.
Moreover
,
Due to
 the crowd of
people
, there is no guarantee that some of them will be sick and able to transfer to others.
Secondly
, crimes are the biggest problem, snatchers take advantage of crowds and steal money as well.
Thus
, travelling by public transportation is not safe.
On the other hand
, the support of the government and imposing some regulations and fines can solve these
issues
. To explain, there should be penalties, if
people
 are not following their obligations and throw garbage or waste in their vehicles.
Furthermore
, authorities need to set up security cameras in each vehicle and station so that it helps to prevent crimes and can catch the snatchers as well.
Therefore
, these rules should be mandatory for everyone to follow
this
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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to settle these problems. In conclusion, these problems can be solved by setting up some rules and
then
 following them with the endorsement of the government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions
  • inequality
  • congestion
  • economic feasibility
  • subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • overcrowding
  • commute
  • incentivize
  • service quality
  • reinvest
  • equitable access
  • fiscal responsibility
  • peak hours
  • public subsidy
  • taxpayer burden
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