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The diagram below gives information about stages of the process of producing of olive oil.

The diagram below gives information about stages of the process of producing of olive oil.
The given flowchart presents information about making olive
oil
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, there are 6 steps in the process, beginning with picking
olives
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 from trees and ending with olive
oil
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. As is given in the graph,
the first
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step
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 is picking
olives
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 from the tress
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the next
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step
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 is to put the
olives
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 in the mill and press them after that
separation
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 the
olives
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 and produce the olive
oil
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 and package it in a bottle, which is the
last
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step
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 in
this
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 flowchart. In general, water is a factor affected in
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step
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In addition
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, time and manpower are important elements that have a major influence on
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 process. After going through these steps the cycle begins again and is repeated indefinitely.
To sum up
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, it can clearly be seen that making olive
oil
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 moves in normal steps,
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 human factors may
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 play a role in affecting the balance.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, olives, step with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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