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The graph below shows prices of houses in three countries between 1978 and 2014.

The graph below shows prices of houses in three countries between 1978 and 2014.
The presented graph compares houses and their prices in A,
B
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 and C
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Country
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Countries
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 between 1978 and 2014. As an
overall
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 trend,
for
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all
of
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the
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apply
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three countries have
rising
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price
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the price
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scale
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scales
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 for housing over the years. It is explicitly observed that
Country
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 A has the highest result of 200K in 1979,
althouh
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although
 it is crystal clear that
constant
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skyrocket
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skyrocketing
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 effect of
accomodation
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accommodation
 value experience
increase
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increases
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. It is worth
to mention
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 the fact of
similar
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a similar
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 downfall for all countries in 1981.
Although
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country
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B
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 has
steady
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the steady
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 performance of pricing from 1984 to 2002,
country
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B
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goes
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went
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 into
free
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a free
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 fall of house value of almost 200k. The graph reveals information about
Country
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 C reportedly experiencing steady growth as
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B
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. Now, turning to the details of an upward trend of
tranquality
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tranquillity
 is obviously
demonstrates
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demonstrated
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 in all of the countries.
Improvement
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The improvement
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 between 2002 and 2014 increase level is around 100k to 300k.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words b, country, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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