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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the proportion of inhabitants in four Asian countries who are living in downtowns from 1970 to 2020 with divination 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, there was
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increase in the population of 4 countries, and Malaysia had risen rapidly by the highest percentage 85 among the group. It
predict
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 that these cities will continue to grow in future. Malaysia and Philadelphia started with the same level about 30% of people living in cities in 1970.
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 Malaysia witnessed
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rapid growth with cities holding roughly 75% of its population by 2020, in terms of
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Philippines
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with some variations between 35% and 45%.
Afterwards
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 Thailand grew for almost 20% of its inhabitants in 1979 compared to
Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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 15%.
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Nonetheless
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 the population of Indonesia
risen
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rose
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 rapidly in 2020,
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 Thailand’s proportion grew by 30%. In
future
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future,
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 it predicts there will be growth in four countries

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 3 times.
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