The line graph provides information about the proportion  of inhabitants in four Asian countries who are living in downtowns from 1970 to 2020 with divination 2030 and 2040.
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, there was Linking Words
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increase in the population of 4 countries, and Malaysia had risen rapidly by the highest percentage 85 among the group. It Change the article
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predict
 that these cities will continue to grow  in future. Malaysia and Philadelphia started with the same level about 30% of people living in cities in 1970. Change the verb form
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Then
 Malaysia witnessed Linking Words
a 
rapid growth with cities holding roughly 75% of its population by 2020, in terms of Remove the article
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Philipenes
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Philippines
was 
with some variations between 35% and 45%.
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Afterwards
 Thailand  grew for almost 20% of its inhabitants in 1979 compared to Add a comma
Afterwards,
Indonesia
 15%. Change noun form
Indonesia's
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 the population of Indonesia Add a comma
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risen
 rapidly in 2020, Wrong verb form
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while
 Thailand’s proportion grew by 30%.
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 it predicts there will be growth in four countriesAdd a comma
future,