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The pie charts show the sources of electricity in the four countries from 2003 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the sources of electricity in the four countries from 2003 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of usage of different sources of electricity produced in four
countries
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 between the years 2003 and 2008. India hit first place with 82
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percent
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 in using of fossil fuels and in the next place Vietnam by 56
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percent
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 is a big user of fossil fuel to produce electricity,
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 two other
countries
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by
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 any reasons are not
following
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this
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 way(fossil fuels) to produce
power
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 and their contribution is less than 5
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percent
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.
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 Noroco by 95
percent
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 steps in first place for the utilization of hydropower. Sweden and Vietnam in order by 52 and 44
percent
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 are in close competition together, but India by 14
percent
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 is not even a competitive opponent in
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 matter.
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, Sweden with a 44
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 contribution to nuclear
power
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 is an undefeated rival in these data, and India by 4
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percent
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 seems to be a toddler in nuclear
power
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,
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 two others have not even moved forward to consider
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 kind of
power
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 source.
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, based on data on pie charts, in progressive or semi-progressive
countries
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 utilization of fossil fuels is going to be less considered in comparison to third-world
countries
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due to
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 the non-renewable feature of
this
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 type of energy.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, percent, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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