the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for makin sugar from sugar cane.

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sugar

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is made from

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canes

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sugar making

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natural

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place, and the rest are

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held by human force and certain

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. The origin plant of

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sugar

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named

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cane grows in its natural habitat for a year to year and a half as the first

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it is

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collected by a harvesting vehicle

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cut by human

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, as the second

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, and after the collecting the canes,

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sticks are

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placed in

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for juicing

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of the canes is purified by a filter named limestone as the fourth

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. In order to make the syrup out of the purified liquid, it is

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heated to evaporate the water in it and

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a fan separates the crystals from the liquid

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sixth stage is called centrifuge and the crystals dry and cool by waiting in a cup as the

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step

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the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for makin sugar from sugar cane.

The population of major cities around the world is increasing very fastly. Why is this the case and what measures could be taken to solve this issue.

Nowaday, it is common to have marriage and children in their thirties rather than in younger age. What is cause behind this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country Discuss both views and give your own opinion.