the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for makin sugar from sugar cane.
The illustration demonstrates how
sugar
is made from Use synonyms
sugar
Use synonyms
canes
.
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cane
Overall
, there are 7 steps included in the Linking Words
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sugar making
process, first two of them Add a hyphen
sugar-making
happens
in Correct subject-verb agreement
happen
natural
place, and the rest are Add an article
a natural
the natural
being
held by human force and certain Unnecessary verb
apply
equipments
.
The origin plant of Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
the
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apply
sugar
named Use synonyms
sugar
cane grows in its natural habitat for a year to year and a half as the first Use synonyms
step
, Use synonyms
then
it is Linking Words
being
collected by a harvesting vehicle Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as a tractor or Linking Words
being
cut by human Unnecessary verb
apply
labor
, as the second Change the spelling
labour
step
, and after the collecting the canes, Use synonyms
sugar
sticks are Use synonyms
then
placed in Linking Words
a mechanical equipment
for juicing
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mechanical equipment
a piece of mechanical equipment
Liquid
of the canes is purified by a filter named limestone as the fourth Correct article usage
The liquid
step
. In order to make the syrup out of the purified liquid, it is Use synonyms
being
heated to evaporate the water in it and Unnecessary verb
apply
then
a fan separates the crystals from the liquid Linking Words
and
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apply
this
sixth stage is called centrifuge and the crystals dry and cool by waiting in a cup as the Linking Words
last
Linking Words
step
.Use synonyms
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