The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The given concepts illustrate a
currently
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industrial place to the east of Norbiton and redevelopment plans.
Overall
, it can be seen that the main goal of
future
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plan is to redevelop into a residential neighbourhood, with additional housing and other supporting facilities. Currently, there is a roundabout that connects a southern and an eastern
road
, with several factories in the area that are to be removed in the redevelopment. The area around the eastern
road
is to be for housing, a school
at the end
, and a playground to the north. Another
road
is planned to be added north from the roundabout and over a river, with housing along the western side of the
road
. The farmland north of the river is to be replaced by additional housing where a
road
parallel to the river is to be constructed and linked to the northbound
road
. There are
also
plans to construct another
road
northwest
from
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the roundabout. More housing is to be built along one side and
at the end
of
this
road
. To the southwest of the roundabout, shops are planned to be constructed. Across the street to the southeast is to be a medical
center
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. A second roundabout is
also
to be added where the south
road
currently meets the main
road
in a T-intersection.
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  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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