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You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the problem explain how it is affecting your work write what you want him to do regarding it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

#company #two #years #computer #office #work #performance #manager #addresses
Dear sir, I am writing
this
 letter to you regarding a
computer
 problem. As i have been working
to
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 your organisation designated
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accountant since 2022.
Although
, my work is going to be good
but
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these days, my
computer
 faces some network or technical
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 which
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bad
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 effect on my
perfromance
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performance
 as well. Actually, being an accountant
i
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 have to prepare datasheets, ledger accounts or balance
sheet
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 on power point excel sheet,
however
,
i
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 open
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excel
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 sheet, my
computer
 just shows some lines or traces of
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sometimes
 it just
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 off all of a sudden .
As a result
,
i
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 could not do my work properly or even my performance level
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 low level
due to
 not submitting datasheets on time to
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 department of our company.
Furthermore
, I have a request to you to send a
computer
 technician to our office so that
problem
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of
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computer
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 can be analyzed and solved effectively and
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 work efficiently as before as possible.
i
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 look forward to
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 you. yours sincerely, John
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence. This helps in organizing your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
Be mindful of grammar and spelling to maintain the clarity of your message. Minor errors can be overlooked, but consistent issues may hinder understanding.
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In your description of the problem, providing specific examples can enhance the clarity and impact of your argument.
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Your letter successfully addresses all parts of the task: describing the problem, explaining its impact, and suggesting a solution.
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The courteous tone throughout the letter is appropriate and respectful, fitting for the context of communication with a manager.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technical difficulties
  • Productivity
  • Deadlines
  • Software glitches
  • Upgrading
  • Hardware malfunction
  • Work disruption
  • Commitment
  • Swift action
  • Consulting
  • Thorough checkup
  • Resolving
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