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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives
Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the
science
.
However
, the most essential target of
science
 is to prompt the
life
 of human beings.
This
 is a controversial issue. From my perspective, I don’t think
such
 a given argument can be justified.
To begin
 with, it is true that
science
 can promote our
life
 since it is convenient for us to live.
For example
, there are
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 of transportation at present which ere not exist before. It
save
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 a lot of time and
provide
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 substitute methods to travel with the development of
science
. When residents go to work, if
the
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 car accident
happen
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,
so
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they may change
the
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 way of commuting
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underground.
Therefore
,
science
 can change our
life
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 and let us live better.
Nevertheless
,
science
also
 can explore something that we don’t know now.
This
 is the same critical as improving people’s lives. When we find out some
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truths
 or
priciples
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principles
,
this
 is necessary for people either, especially for the future.
For instance
, some
scientist
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 research the universe, which can not enhance the quality of
life
, but it is crucial
fo
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 people.
As a result
, exploring the
unknow
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such
 as the universe is as important as
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human’s
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 lives. As far as I am concerned
science
 can increase our quality of
life
, but it is rather reckless to jump to
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 conclusion that it
also
 can explore some unknown things.
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Introduction & Conclusion
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Language Accuracy
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Supporting Examples
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Task Response
Your essay addresses the topic directly and presents a reasoned argument, acknowledging both sides of the debate.
Use of Examples
You effectively use examples to illustrate your points, demonstrating an understanding of how scientific advancements can impact everyday life.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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