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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.
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The three different diagrams
indicateMeadowside
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indicate
town
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 and Fonton, a neighbouring village layout and how it has changed for the years
in
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1962,1985, and the present. By comparing the three maps,
it is clear that
this
 place has undergone diverse development
along with
 improvements which
including
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 the construction of
new
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the new
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 hotel, a business park, and a supermarket. Before the development,
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in 1962
in1962
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in 1962
, the layout of
village
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the village
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seems
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 very simple and underdeveloped
while
 in 1985, two roads
added
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were added
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 and
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a leisure
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leisure
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 complex entre
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built
builted
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built
 near the road. Next to the leisure building,
housing
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a housing
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 area was
builted
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built
 and
accros
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across
 the street we can
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store
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a store
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. By looking at the
last
 diagram,
it is clear that
 diverse infrastructure had
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been build
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build
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for
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 instance,
hotel
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hotels
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 and
station
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stations
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, and
park
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parks
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.The hotel and
stastion
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station
is
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 located centre of the village and
busniss
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business
 park is sited
south
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the south
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 part of the map.
In addition
, one more train road has
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build
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.
Furthermore
, the area was entirely expanded.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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