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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
 of visitors to a specific Caribbean
island
, which is categorized based on whether they stayed on the
island
 itself or on cruise ships, over the
period
 between 2010 and 2017. In general,
it is clear that
 there was not only a fluctuation in the first half of the
period
 but
also
 the increasing value of tourism
in
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on
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this
island
 over the eight-year
period
. Starting
with
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in
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 2010, there
was
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were
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 only one million
of
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apply
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people visiting
this
island
.
While
 three-forth of them decided to accomodate on the isle, a quarter of
million
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a million
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 tourists stayed on their own liners. The figure for those who stay
in
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on
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 their cruises
then
 fluctuated between a quarter and a half of a million for the next 3 years.
Island
 stayers,
on the other hand
, experienced a stable status in
number
 for the first 2 years before
increased
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increasing
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 rapidly to 1.25
millions
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million
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 in 2012 and 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2013.
For
this
 reason, the total
number
 of
individual
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individuals
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who traveled
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traveled
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travelled
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 to
this
 land
increase
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increased
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 gradually to 2
millions
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million
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 by the year 2013.
On
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In
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 the second half
the
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of the
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period
, the data of people who stopped by the isle
had
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did
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 not
witnessed
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witness
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 any increasing
number
 in between 2013
to
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and
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 2017.
However
, there
are
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was
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 a slight decrease to 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors in 2016 before
recover
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recovering
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 back to 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
Crusier
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Cruiser
 ships to
this
island
 had
skyrocketted
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skyrocketed
 in the
number
 of
the
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apply
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customers, beating the isle stayers in 2016 and
increased
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increasing
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 to 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017. 2016
also
witness
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witnessed
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 a pause in the rapid growth of the total of
this
island
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island's
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 visitors. The value had increased from 2
millions
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million
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 to 3.5
millions
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million
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 over the 4-year
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, period, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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