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The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002

The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002
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The graph elucidates the information on the products supplied in the United Kingdom from 1974 to 2002.
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, it can be seen that there was a significant increase in
import
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the import
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 of all the goods over the period, where
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the pipeline
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pipeline
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pipelines
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 was lowest and
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the road
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road
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roads
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was
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were
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 highest in supply in 1974. At first glance, it is apparent that the import proportion of
road
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roads
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 was 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and it rose steadily to reach a peak of 90
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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, the buying
demad
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demand
of
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for
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pipeline
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pipelines
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also
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 increased significantly from approximately 5
million
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tonnes
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 to 22
million
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tonnes
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 in between
this
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 time.
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, water and rail both were almost
at
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in
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same
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the same
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 demand in 1974.
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 the sale of water climbed sharply
over
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to over
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 60
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of these 28 years,
whereas
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 rale was just inclined by a
million
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tonne
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tonnes
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 and the least favorite merchandise among all these four products.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount
  • transported
  • UK
  • increased
  • significantly
  • 28-year period
  • first decade
  • steady increase
  • significant jump
  • highest point
  • gradual decline
  • minor increase
  • dropped
  • similar level
  • goods
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