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Nowadays, instead of locally sourced produce, many supermarkets sell a variety of imported foods from all around the world. Does this advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

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These days increasing the very strong local items. All supermarkets sell many
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 and foods from all around the world. it becomes a
country
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 with more cons. In
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 essay, I will discuss it. On the one hand, in the countries bringing local foods it is can bond the government and other local countries.
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is the
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's
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product goes to decrease very fast.
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, the
country
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's
people
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's economic difficulties arise.
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, my causing brother has a chicken farm. He earns money from chicken
eggs
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. Our government brings the
eggs
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 from India. For a cheap amount of money it.
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, our
country
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's
people
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 purchase Indian
eggs
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. That's why, my brother's business is lost.
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,
eggs
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 are very expired and they put up the
eggs
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 some comical and color.
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,
people
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 who eat these
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 have some stomach problems and they have to be admitted to the hospital.
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, bringing the local product affected in many ways.
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, if the government makes a decision to Bring local
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 it can improve both the contest relationship and the economy of the
country
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 become increases.
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, some
people
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 buy dry fish from a pure very cheap and they will all their expensive prices. It can be both
country
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's bond develop and there for our
country
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products
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people
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 do not buy. In conclusion, These days countries
people
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 buy local
products
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 from another
country
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 so
people
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 do not get our product.
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, some health issues and they have a variety of problems
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 way.

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Introduction
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Examples
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Language
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Conclusion
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Examples
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Task Response
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Your opinion

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