Topic: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The supplied graph demonstrates how many changes have happened
for
Change preposition
in
cost
of three metals Add an article
the cost
such
as zinc, copper and nickel in 2014.
Overall
; nickel started with the highest price but ended the
lowest Change preposition
at the
to compare
to the others, Change the verb form
compared
while
; copper has the completely opposite situation. Moreover
; zinc
line has Correct article usage
the zinc
been fluctuated
these months.
Change to the active voice
fluctuated
According to
the graph; the price of nickel was 6 per cent
on
January. it fell down to 1 Change preposition
in
on
May, and it Change preposition
in
has
steadily passed for the next month. Unnecessary verb
apply
In addition
; it sudden
fell to -3 per Change the word
suddenly
cent
in June and went up to -1 on
July. The trend Change preposition
in
of
Change preposition
apply
it
was stable until September, and decreasedCorrect pronoun usage
apply
1
Change preposition
by 1
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
on
October but Change preposition
in
has
a spurt Wrong verb form
had
growth
for the Change preposition
of growth
last
month.
Zinc rose to 3 per cent
on
February, and it gradually peaked Change preposition
in
down to
-1 per Change preposition
at
cent
on
June. Change preposition
in
However
; it had a little growth for three months, it
came back to -1 the same as past. The line briskly came up to 2 per Correct word choice
and it
cent
on
December. Copper started from 2 per Change preposition
in
cent
on
January, and it was in fluctuated until July. Change preposition
in
Furthermore
; the line was steadily
for 1 per Change the word
steady
cent
until September but it had a reduction then
increased to near
2 per Change the word
nearly
cent
for the last
month.Submitted by abhari1997 on
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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