1.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package
Dear Konsti
How are you? I had left my job in
factory
and got a new position in town. Three months ago, our factory Add an article
a factory
the factory
having
a new manager Wrong verb form
had
then
everything changed after personnel
promotion. The looming global recession was happening, meanwhile, we had been cut a quarter of wholesale orders from China. Correct article usage
a personnel
Add an article
The company
Company
been forced to Add the auxiliary verb
Company has
faced
financial management like cost reduction. Allowance and bonus cancellation were just beginning. Change the form of the verb
face
Fowllowing
Correct your spelling
Followed
with
a group of Change preposition
by
employees
resignation. Change noun form
employees'
employee's
On the other hand
, the rest of employees
had Correct article usage
the employees
heavy
workload but less Correct article usage
a heavy
paid
. I was too frustrated to keep Replace the word
pay
on
Change preposition
in
this
position due to
this
situation.
Fortunely
, I got a new occupation which is a laboratory technician Correct your spelling
Fortunately
in
the next week after I resigned. Change preposition
apply
Correct article usage
The Comtitiveness
Comtitiveness
and distinctiveness of Correct your spelling
Competitiveness
brand
are part of Correct article usage
the brand
reasons
I wish to participate. Correct article usage
the reasons
In addition
, the wage is twice of my previous job also
having
Wrong verb form
have
bonus
monthly. Correct article usage
a bonus
This
is not only a good news
but Remove the article
good news
a piece of good news
also
a benefit to my saving
.
I am excited to have a new start Fix the agreement mistake
savings
as well as
our reunion. Keep in touch.
See you soon.
DavidSubmitted by d11206 on
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Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal, fitting the context of a letter to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure of your letter is logical, making it easy for the reader to follow your transition from one job to the next.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite