The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The 2 pictures
illlustrate
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illustrate
differences
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the differences
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of
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between
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the central
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central
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Central
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Library
of
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20
years
before and today. The layout seems no modification
comparing
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compared
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with 20
years
ago. There are 4 rooms located in 4 corners and some functional areas arranged in walkways. There is a computer
room
on the left of
entrance
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the entrance
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and a cafe on the right of it. But 20
years
before they were Reading
room
on the left and Enquiry desk on the right. On the first left walkway, all
reference
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the reference
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books
you can find now. on the
opposite
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you will find adult fiction
books
,
information
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desk and self-service machines
all together
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. Back
to
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20
years
before, Adult fiction and non-fiction
books
sit
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on left and right walkways. In the middle were tables and chairs supplied.
In
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At
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the end of the library, you will find Children's fiction
books
and Storytelling events
on
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in
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the left
room
with 2 sofas where was
a
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CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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games
room
in
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20
years
before
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ago
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. The left
room
changed from
Children's
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the Children's
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book to
Lecture
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the Lecture
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room
now.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, room, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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