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The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the pie chart provides the proportion of
users
 of different languages on the Internet
while
 the table
reavels
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reveals
revels
 the total user numbers and their percentages of
world
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 population.
Overall
, the vast majority of people used English online, whilst Dutch
users
 were the fewest.
Moreover
,the number of online
users
 skyrocketed from November 1997 to August 2001.
According to
 the information shown in the pie chart, there were 43% of online
users
 who used English which was 20 times more than Dutch ones by 2.1%.On
ther
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 other hand, there was a 1% gap between Japanese
users
 and Chinese
users
which
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 the former was 8.9% and the latter was 8,8%.As for the total number of online
users
, it experienced more than 6 times growth between November 1997 and August
200l
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2000l
 from 16 million people to 513 million people as its percentage of world population increased from 1.8% to 8.4%. What should be particularly mentioned is that the two years between August 1999 and August 2001 were the main period that the figure for online
users
 significantly increased by 318 million individuals.
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