The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The graph gives information about the proportion of households with electrical appliances and
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number of hours of housework per household in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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it is clear that
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there was an upward trend in the percentages of families having one of the 3 machines with varying degrees
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the amount of time spent doing housework experienced a significant decrease over the given period.
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worth mentioning that the share of owners of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners achieved its peak point at different times. Looking at the details, at
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the refrigerator was the main figure with a modest share of ownership of electrical equipment, accounting for 0 %. Meanwhile, the figure for the vacuum and washing machine stood at 30% and 40% respectively. During the next 20 years, all 3 figures observed a various increase,reaching between 50% and 60%. Over the next years, there was an upward trend in refrigerators and vacuum cleaners in terms of ownership of electrical machines till 1980 and 2000 respectively with various levels of rise. After gradual growth, these figures remained unchanged at 100% until
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the end. The figure for washing
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increased to more than 70% with some fluctuation in 2019.Households spending time on house chores at the beginning of the given period made up 50 hours
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it witnessed a dramatic decline to 10 hours in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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