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The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
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The given pie charts provide information on various types of transportation that
people
 use to get to work or study in 2004 and 2009 in one country.
Overall
, in 2004 the most preferable type of transportation was cars, followed by buses and the least was trains. In 2009 figures had changed and
people
 started to choose more buses rather than cars, and the percentage of using trains remained relatively the same.
According to
 the charts, in 2004 the percentage of
people
 who used cars accounted for 51%,
while
 in 2009 the figures for the same type of transportation reduced to 28%. On the second place of choice among
people
 in 2004 was buses with 33%,
whereas
 in 2009 there was an increase to 46% and the same type of transport became at the top of the list.
In contrast
, there is the same position among
people
 who preferred
bicycle
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 in 2004 and 2009 and accounted for 9% and 16%, respectively. The figures for trains did not change a lot, only by 1% in 2009.
However
, there is a little growth
of
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in
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 the percentage of
people
 who chose walking by 2% from 2004 to 2009.
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