The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the ratio of the communities of four kinds of Asian regions living in urban over the period of 50 years with new projections from 2030 to 2240.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are projected rise in the population of all countries examined.
Additionally
, during most of the period,
people
living in the urban of the Phillippines were the most fluctuating. In the 1970s, the ratio of
people
living in
cities
of
the
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Malaysia stood at 30%, as much as nearly 3 times when compared to the figure of Indonesia. But, from the 1970s onwards, the proportion of
people
living in the urban in Malaysia stood at just over 80%, the highest of the chart. Meanwhile, the ratio of the population living in
cities
in Indonesia
also
rapidly increased, as much as five times when compared to the first examined years. In the 1970s, the rate of
people
living in
cities
of the Philippines region stood at just over 30%, the highest figure of that year. Between 1980 and 1990, there were a witnessed same slight increases to 45% and 25% for both the populations living in urban of the Philippines and Thailand respectively before dropdown and stood at approximately 41% and below 20% respectively.
Additionally
, with the 20% of the population living in
cities
in Thailand had
became
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the lowest percentage of the chart in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "examined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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