The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.
The line chart depicts the information about the visitors who visited a specific Caribbean Island over the
period
from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured in Use synonyms
millions
.
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Overall
, as can be clearly seen from the graph, the total number of Linking Words
tourists
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and
who preferred to stay on cruise ships increased throughout the Correct word choice
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period
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While
the number of visitors who chose to stay on the island did not witness any significant change over the given Linking Words
period
.
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Regarding the
total number of Change preposition
The
tourists
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have
seen a steady increase since 2010. At the start of the Correct subject-verb agreement
has
period
, it made up 1 Use synonyms
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
and Use synonyms
finally
accounted for exactly 3.5 Linking Words
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
in 2017. Use synonyms
Additionally
, visitors who chose to stay on cruise ships were approximately 0.25 Linking Words
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
in 2010, they Use synonyms
then
witnessed a slight increase Linking Words
at
0.5 Change preposition
to
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
in 2011Use synonyms
,
and again experienced a gradual growth during a Remove the comma
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6-years
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6-year
period
which constituted precisely 2 Use synonyms
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
.
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In contrast
, the figure for the Linking Words
tourists
who were staying on Use synonyms
island
started at nearly 0.75 Add an article
the island
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
in 2010 and Use synonyms
remain
unchanged until 2011. Wrong verb form
remained
Moreover
, they climbed up gradually before levelling off at 1.5 Linking Words
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
from 2013 onwards. Use synonyms
Finally
, the figure finished at 1.5 Linking Words
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millions
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million
of
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tourists
in 2017.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, millions, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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