The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.
The line chart depicts the information about the visitors who visited a specific Caribbean Island over the
period
from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured in
millions
.
Overall
, as can be clearly seen from the graph, the total number of
tourists
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who preferred to stay on cruise ships increased throughout the
period
.
While
the number of visitors who chose to stay on the island did not witness any significant change over the given
period
.
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total number of
tourists
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seen a steady increase since 2010. At the start of the
period
, it made up 1
millions
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of
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tourists
and
finally
accounted for exactly 3.5
millions
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of
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tourists
in 2017.
Additionally
, visitors who chose to stay on cruise ships were approximately 0.25
millions
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tourists
in 2010, they
then
witnessed a slight increase
at
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0.5
millions
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tourists
in 2011
,
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and again experienced a gradual growth during a
6-years
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period
which constituted precisely 2
millions
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tourists
.
In contrast
, the figure for the
tourists
who were staying on
island
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started at nearly 0.75
millions
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tourists
in 2010 and
remain
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unchanged until 2011.
Moreover
, they climbed up gradually before levelling off at 1.5
millions
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tourists
from 2013 onwards.
Finally
, the figure finished at 1.5
millions
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tourists
in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, millions, tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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