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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words.

#foods #acid #mouth #tooth #decay #levels #ph #values #information #implications #health #minutes
The line graph illustrates the
Ph
 values affected by acid levels in the mouth via
consumption
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the consumption
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 of Fruit
sugar
 ,
cane
sugar
 and honey,which can
cause
 tooth decay.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the consumption of all sweet foods in a short
time
 elapses witnessed not the
cause
 increase in acid
level
 at which tooth decay occurs,
while
 the opposite was true for eating sweet foods with long elapses. From the
time
 elapsed after eating
sugar
 5
minutes
 to below 15
minutes
, the
cane
sugar
 stood at 3.5
PH
level
, the lowest
Ph
level
 when compared to another two kinds of sweet
sugar
.
In addition
,
with
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apply
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the 3.5
Ph
level
 of
cane
sugar
 during
this
 period
time
, which can the most
cause
 tooth decay occurs. Meanwhile, Honey which the sweet
sugar
 the safest for the mount from 20
minutes
 to 25
minutes
time
 elapsed after eating
the
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apply
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food contains
sugar
 with
the
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a
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 7
ph
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pH
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level
.
Additionally
, from 30
minutes
 onwards, Fruit
sugar
 and Honey remain
unchangedd
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unchanged
 at 7
ph
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pH
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level
 and become
the
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apply
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foods safe for the mouth.
However
,
cane
sugar
become
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becomes
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 the lowest food that
safe
Add a missing verb
is safe
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 for the mouth, which can
cause
of
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apply
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the long
time
 elapsed after eating.
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