The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
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table illustrates how many workers and companies produced silk in two countries from 1851 to 1901.
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, total figures for employees declined significantly over
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period,
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the
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of factories increased. The
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of
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and females decreased to 1901.
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the table, the highest
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and females was in 1851 with 53.964 and 76.786, respectively.
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, the figures
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females stayed higher than
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throughout the entire time period and accounted for 25.567 people to 1901,
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males
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accounted for only 13.375. The total
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of employees witnessed the same trend and fell dramatically to 38.942 people in 1901.
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, factories showed rapid growth from 272 in 1851 to 761 in 1861,
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there were fluctuations from 761 to 663 during the time period from 1861 to 1891.
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, the figures continued to fall by 40 factories and reached
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623
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1901.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Industrial expansion
  • Manufacturing hub
  • Technological innovation
  • Economic contribution
  • Productivity enhancement
  • Global market dynamics
  • Urbanization
  • Workforce demographics
  • Production scale
  • Social implications
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