The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
An illustration
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depicts processing for converting to
sugar
from
sugar
cane .
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, it involves
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7 stages
begin
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with harvesting and crushing them to
juice
and
then
making
juice
to
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syrup by heating up and
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end into
sugar
. It takes between (12 -18 ) months period for
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sugar
canes
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.after
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that it
started
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harvesting to put them
for
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crushing
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the crushing
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machine to get
juice
from it , to purify the
juice
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is added to filter it . At stage 5 , it
heated
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in high flame
juice
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into syrup through evaporation and
next
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stage centrifuge divides
sugar
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the sugar
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crystals from
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the syrup
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and
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final
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stage
sugar
crystals
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for drying and cooling and
then
it ready for consumption.
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