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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
#process #sugar #cane
An illustration
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depicts processing for converting to
sugar
 from
sugar
 cane .
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, it involves
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7 stages
begin
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beginning
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 with harvesting and crushing them to
juice
 and
then
 making
juice
to
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into
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 syrup by heating up and
final
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 end into
sugar
 . It takes between (12 -18 ) months period for
growing
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grow
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sugar
canes
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cane
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.after
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After
 that it
started
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starts
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 harvesting to put them
for
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crushing
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the crushing
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 machine to get
juice
 from it , to purify the
juice
lime stone
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 is added to filter it . At stage 5 , it
heated
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 in high flame
juice
turn
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turns
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 into syrup through evaporation and
next
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the next
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 stage centrifuge divides
sugar
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the sugar
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 crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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 and
at
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final
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the final
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 stage
sugar
 crystals
send
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are sent
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 for drying and cooling and
then
 it ready for consumption.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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