The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
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The two pie charts below
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the
sales
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for online shopping in different categories in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.
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, the sector with the highest number of
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travel in the year 2003,
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numbers did not stay as the most spent on category as the numbers dwindled after 10 years by 7%.
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, people showed an interest
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film and music since the
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category rose up to 12% in the year 2013.
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, there was not much change
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the percentage of
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for both the book and clothing sector in New Zealand. Both sectors remained the lowest category on which people were spending
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with only a 3% rise
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books
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clothes decreased by 8%. To sum it up, the residents of New Zealand are more keen on investing
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film and music after a decade.
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