The internet has changed the way we communicate. Much communication today happens through social media. Some people support this and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media have negative effects.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Thanks to the development
on
social Change preposition
of
media
, our communication methods have been
changed these days. Some Unnecessary verb
apply
people
support this
and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media
have negative effects. There are some people
who recognize that this
development has positive
impact on human lives. Add an article
a positive
On the other hand
, other people
think there are detrimental effects on
social Change preposition
of
media
. In this
essay, I will discuss both perspective
and provide my opinion on the issue Change to a plural noun
perspectives
about
social Change preposition
of
media
.
To begin
with, Using social media
allows individuals to connect with others whenever and wherever they like. In the past, it was not easy to keep in touch with someone due to
the costs and times sending
letters or giving a call. Change preposition
of sending
However
, recently we can send massages
more affordable through SNS services without investing any resources. Correct your spelling
messages
As a result
, it has been easier to built
good relationships with family or friends nowadays.
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build
In contrast
, I believe that we need to think about some disadvantages about
SNS. Change preposition
of
For example
, the inclination of not having direct meeting
will decrease communication skills considering facial expressions or body Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
languages
, which may make human relationships weaker. Fix the agreement mistake
language
Moreover
, using SNS leads people
to a dangerous situation occasionally because we can interact with unfamiliar individuals. In that point, there is no doubt that many crimes through social media
have been occurred
today. Change to the active voice
occurred
As a result
, we need to recognize that social media
has some negative impacts and prevent accidents when we use them.
In conclusion, there are both positive and negative effects on social media
, then
individuals have to take great care of it when they use
. If Correct pronoun usage
use it
people
use it with safe
, it encourages Rephrase
safely
human
to make our lives more lively.Fix the agreement mistake
humans
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Grammar
Ensure consistent use of tense and accurate verb forms to maintain clarity and professionalism in your writing.
Spelling
Be mindful of spelling consistency (e.g., 'massages' should be 'messages') to maintain the accuracy and professionalism of your essay.
Cohesion
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Specific Examples
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Content
You've effectively discussed both views on the impact of social media, providing a balanced analysis.
Structure
Your introduction and conclusion are clear, summarizing the main points of the essay well.
Grammar
You've shown an ability to use a variety of sentence structures, which adds interest and demonstrates linguistic competency.