The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Contained in the two maps is information pertaining to the changes
of
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a public
library
from 20 years ago to the present day.
Overall
, it can be seen that more amenities are added to the whole
library
whilst
books
are still available for children and
adult
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adults
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. Moving onto the central part of the
library
where some tables and chairs were removed to create a huge blank space there. Regarding
to
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the North East, the previous children’s
books
room
was replaced by a lecture
room
with the relocation of adult
fiction
books
outside the
room
from the opposite side. Not only the replacement of the
fiction
books
but
also
the addition of an information desk and three self-service machines which were deposited in front of these
books
, respectively.
Similarly
, located in the South East of the
library
, the enquiry desk
where
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which
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many customers used to use
it
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to get
the
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tickets or book returns
were
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was
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also
converted into a cafe for bookers. Turning to the South West, it can be observed that the reading
room
where
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which
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contained newspapers and magazines was modernized to become a computer
room
.
Moreover
, the changes
also
occured
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occurred
outside the reading
room
, particularly
is
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in
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the removal of adult
fiction
books
to the East
and
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which
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was replaced with all
references
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books
in the
library
. With respect to the North West, the
room
on the top of the left corner which stored CDs, videos and computer games, was renovated with the aim of celebrating storytelling events.
Besides
,
this
room
also
added children’s
fiction
books
with a couple of
sofa
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, laying the groundwork for customer’s convenience.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books, room, fiction with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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