The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
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The pie charts show the percentages of shopping
sales
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using online media for 4 sectors in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.
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, there was an increase and a decrease in proportion. It is interesting to note that the highest increase was in the film/music
sector
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,
while
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the highest decrease was in the clothing
sector
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. Looking at the beginning of the period, in 2003, the highest proportion of online
sales
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was travel (36%), followed by clothing
sales
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with almost a quarter. The film/music
sector
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got
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slightly over 20% and book
sales
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by 19 per cent of the total, which was the lowest
sales
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in that period. Turning to the end of the period, in 2013, after a decade, the film/music
sector
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had increased by 12% to 33%, followed by the book transaction, which had risen by 3% to slightly over 20 per cent. Meanwhile, the clothing area suffered a decline to 16% of the total proportion and the travel
sector
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saw a decrease to 29%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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