If a product is good or it meets people's needs, people will buy it so advertising is unnecessary and no more than entertainment. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
In terms of commerce, many brands make confidence buy
of
products following the consumer's demand which is high quality and stability rather than Change preposition
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take
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However
, I would argue that many presentations through video and content have an influence on my decision including conversations of the big
companies.
Even though,
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advertisement
for regular purchasers who Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
impressed
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the
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not significant, Correct subject-verb agreement
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it doesn't create to entice for big fans, it persuades the unknowns Correct word choice
apply
instead
. Obviously, many convincing are found easily via publishing, video, influencer,and billboard. As Coke and Pepsi which are the well know
beverages of people around the world by generations still have the publication considerably on every platform by using high ranking of influencers, that represents the Correct your spelling
well-known
necessary
of advertising which impacts and creates the commercial advantage for the company.
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necessity
Additionally
, people will promote the products passed on by word of mouth automatically if the quality is an
evident showing noticeably. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, the messages would not tell by the original story, others are hard to understand well,especially on the specific goods which need some processes by purchasers. For example
, I have seen the promoted content of garlic butter on Instagram
shop that explained how to cook because new customers Add an article
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quantity
of ingredients when they grilled. Change the quantifier
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Therefore
, not only promoting but publishing also
informs the real purpose of products by creators, exclusively for new ones who are persuaded by others promoting without well known
information.
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, a good product is an important part of business
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the producers would be added in the same way to get engagement from customers. Change preposition
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As a result
,both strategies are effective together.Submitted by kanchanakularathna1991 on
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Structure
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Develop your arguments further with more detailed examples and explanations. While you have provided some examples, more specific details would strengthen your argument.
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