The bar chart beow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010,
The bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female citizens in different age groups
Correct pronoun usage
who participate
participate
Wrong verb form
participated
in particular
physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, it is clear that
physical activity in Australia is mostly attended by women. However
, it seems like male youth, between 15 to 24, love to join this
activity.
To begin
with, three age groups of female individuals, around 40, 50 and 60 years
old, have almost the same percentage of working out, which was 53%. Followed by 30 years
old group occupied 48.9% as well as
both the youngest and the eldest registered roughly the same number, at 47%.
On the other hand
, male youngers
used their free time on physical play which was just under 53%. Correct your spelling
youngsters
This
trend slightly dropped in the 30 and the 40 age groups, at 42.2% and 39.5% respectively. Furthermore
, it increased in 50 years
, at 43%, 60 years
, at 45%, and 46% in the oldest group which was nearly the same as in female elders.Submitted by nnatthinee on
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