The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
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above pictures
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Stokeford
city
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on
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the
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1930 and 2010. As it's obvious, various changes
had
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hapened
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happened
during these 80
years
. First of all in 1930, the large
houses
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removed and turned into retirement
house
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houses
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.
Furthermore
, the gardens were removed and replaced by 4 other
houses
.
Secondly
,
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school has been enlarged into a bigger school after
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8 decades The one interesting change that
happend
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happened
after all these
years
is that shops have been removed and the area has been filled
by
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houses
which is not a positive change because now folks need to drive to other nearby cities for shipping their necessities. The
last
eyacatching
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eyecatching
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change that happened is that Farmlands have been removed and replaced by numerous
houses
.
On the other hand
, it's surprising that
post
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the post
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office has been remained and
didn't
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enlarged or
removed
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moved
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to another place. There are a number of
houses
on the main road that still
remained
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and haven't been removed.
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the 2 trees in
retirement
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the retirement
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house area
are
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there
from
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pas
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past
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years
and haven't been cut down which is
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good. The bridge has
been
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remained on its spot from 80
years
ago and no
houses
or shops have been widespread around the bridge.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
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