The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

#show #village #stockefort

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above pictures

are showing

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Stokeford

city

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City

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the

year

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years

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1930 and 2010. As it's obvious, various changes

had

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have

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hapened

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happened

during these 80

years

. First of all in 1930, the large

houses

has been

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were

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removed and turned into retirement

house

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houses

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Furthermore

, the gardens were removed and replaced by 4 other

houses

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primary

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school has been enlarged into a bigger school after

passing

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8 decades The one interesting change that

happend

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happened

after all these

years

is that shops have been removed and the area has been filled

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with

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houses

which is not a positive change because now folks need to drive to other nearby cities for shipping their necessities. The

last

eyacatching

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eyecatching

eye-catching

change that happened is that Farmlands have been removed and replaced by numerous

houses

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, it's surprising that

post

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the post

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office has been remained and

didn't

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hasn't

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enlarged or

removed

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moved

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to another place. There are a number of

houses

on the main road that still

remained

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and haven't been removed.

Also

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the 2 trees in

retirement

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the retirement

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house area

are

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have been

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there

from

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for

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pas

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past

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years

and haven't been cut down which is

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good. The bridge has

been

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remained on its spot from 80

years

ago and no

houses

or shops have been widespread around the bridge.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

208 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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transformation
infrastructure
facilities
landscape
sparse population
residential areas
commercial zones
recreational facilities
agricultural lands
local economy
transportation infrastructure
connectivity
public amenities
green spaces
quality of life
historical buildings
landmarks
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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that the best way to succeed is to get a university education, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might ther be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?