The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

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The 2

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above pictures

are showing

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Stokeford

city

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City

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the

year

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years

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1930 and 2010. As it's obvious, various changes

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hapened

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happened

during these 80

years

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. First of all in 1930, the large

houses

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has been

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removed and turned into retirement

house

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houses

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Furthermore

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, the gardens were removed and replaced by 4 other

houses

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Secondly

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primary

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school has been enlarged into a bigger school after

passing

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8 decades The one interesting change that

happend

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happened

after all these

years

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is that shops have been removed and the area has been filled

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with

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houses

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which is not a positive change because now folks need to drive to other nearby cities for shipping their necessities. The

last

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eyacatching

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eyecatching

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change that happened is that Farmlands have been removed and replaced by numerous

houses

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, it's surprising that

post

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the post

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office has been remained and

didn't

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hasn't

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enlarged or

removed

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moved

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to another place. There are a number of

houses

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on the main road that still

remained

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and haven't been removed.

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Also

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the 2 trees in

retirement

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the retirement

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house area

are

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there

from

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for

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pas

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past

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years

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and haven't been cut down which is

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good. The bridge has

been

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remained on its spot from 80

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ago and no

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or shops have been widespread around the bridge.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, houses with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

208 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

transformation
infrastructure
facilities
landscape
sparse population
residential areas
commercial zones
recreational facilities
agricultural lands
local economy
transportation infrastructure
connectivity
public amenities
green spaces
quality of life
historical buildings
landmarks
preservation
urban development
environmental impacts
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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

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