Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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student and their interaction with local students in the school
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beneficial or not.
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backgrounds is something that requires our attention.As a person who has
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personality is
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made when they are teenagers.
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their interaction with others,
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experience and the formation of their demeanor.
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considered as a gold time of human
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.
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their knowledge and strengthens
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different
culture
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affected
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in Iran.The way
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children's
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are growing up there,it's completely
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different
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,the parents are eager to treat their children
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relevant
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people who have
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from another
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,despite having
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with international students in some points is beneficial,some parents are not
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in it.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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