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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. (percentage)

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. (percentage)
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The line graph below indicates the
percentage
 of
car
 ownership in the UK between 1975 to 2005.
Overall
, the
percentage
 of people with 3 cars is
on
Change preposition
at
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 the bottom of the chart
while
,
Remove the comma
apply
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 the
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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 with 1
car
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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on
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at
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 the peak of the chart.
To begin
 with, the
percentage
 of 1
car
 owned
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 45 in 1975
then
 in 1985 it decreased to under 40
percent
 in 1995 it had a
little
Correct word choice
small
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 rise that reached almost 42
percent
 again in 2005 it reached as same level as
1975
Change preposition
in 1975
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. The amount of 0
car
 ownership in 1975
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 over 40 but in 1985 it had a significant reduction that the
percentage
 reached 25
then
in
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apply
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it had a small decrease in 1995 which decreased
1
Change preposition
by 1
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unit and in 2005 again had a very
less
Correct word choice
small
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 decrease
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
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 around 22. The
percentage
 of 2
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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 owned in 1975 was above 5 in 1985
had
Correct word choice
and had
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 a significant growth that reached
near
Change the word
nearly
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 15 in 1995
was
Correct word choice
and was
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 again
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 but in 2005 the
percentage
 reached around 18. The
percentage
 of 0
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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 owned in 1975 was under 5
then
 in 1985 it reached 5
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
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 in
continue
Wrong verb form
continued
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, in 1995 it went over 5
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
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 and in 2005 it had a dramatical rising that reached almost 9
percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, car, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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