The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates statistics which
was
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were
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reported by
United
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the United
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Nations
about social rates
as well as
economical
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economics
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in four
countries
in 1994.
Overall
, it can be seen that people who live in developed
countries
, Canada and Japan, not only had a better
life-style
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lifestyle
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situation in comparison to third-world
nations
but
also
they
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apply
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were situated in better
postion
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positions
financially.
Also
,
Zaire
was the poorest country
amoung
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among
all four other
countries
. On the one hand, among all those four
nations
Japan had the highest amount of annual wages per person, 15760 USD, which was about
hundred
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a hundred
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times higher than in
Zaire
where people had the lowest amount of salary in USD,130 USD.
Also
, in
countries
with higher
earning
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earnings
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the number of calories which was used was higher than
developing
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in developing
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nations
. Canada had the most consumable individuals with 3326 calories each
days
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day
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while
Zaire
with consuming 47
colories
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calories
per day had the lowest amount of usage.
On the other hand
, the life expectancy in Japan in 1994 stood at the highest and Canada was in second place with 78% and 76%
repectively
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respectively
.
However
,
people
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the people
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of
Zaire
had the lowest hope about life with only 47%.
Countries
with the highest expectancy indicators had the
most
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highest
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literacy
rate
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rates
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with 99% for each country ,
Incontrast
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In contrast
Zaire
citizens with
34
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a 34
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% rate of literacy had the lowest rate in 1994.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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