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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
This
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 picture is about the village of
stockefort
Change the capitalization
Stockefort
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 that similar between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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,
It’s appears
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It appears
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 that
village
Correct article usage
the village
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 is modernized after 80 years, and many places
were
Wrong verb form
have been
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 constructed.
for example
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, shops were cut down, and some houses were built
instead
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 of shops. One interesting change is that farmland was pulled down and one neighborhood replaced them.In 1930 there was
retirement
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a retirement
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 home but in 1930 there was a large house in that
place
Use synonyms
.
school
Fix the agreement mistake
Schools
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have
Wrong verb form
had
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 been developed and were bigger than in1930,
river
Add an article
the river
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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 not changing,
In
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On
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nourth
Correct your spelling
north
 of
map
Correct article usage
the map
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 farmland
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 removed and many cows
were traveled
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have traveled
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another
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to another
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place
Use synonyms
, another
place
Use synonyms
for example
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 near the post office there were erected a road that it connected some home to
main
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the main
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 road,another striking change is that the circle
place
Use synonyms
 was built in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of some house
instead
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 of
farmingland
Correct your spelling
farming land
farmland
, the Garden used to be a green area with a lot of trees , but trees have been cut down , and a new home has been constructed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example, instead".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
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