The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
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picture is about the village of
stockefort
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Stockefort

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that similar between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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,
It’s appears
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It appears

It appears that the form of the verb appears does not work with ’s in this sentence.

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that
village
Correct article usage
the village

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is modernized after 80 years, and many places
were
Wrong verb form
have been

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb were. Consider changing it.

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constructed.
for example
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, shops were cut down, and some houses were built
instead
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of shops. One interesting change is that farmland was pulled down and one neighborhood replaced them.In 1930 there was
retirement
Correct article usage
a retirement

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home but in 1930 there was a large house in that
place
Use synonyms

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.
school
Fix the agreement mistake
Schools

It seems that school may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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have
Wrong verb form
had

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb have. Consider changing it.

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been developed and were bigger than in1930,
river
Add an article
the river

The noun phrase river seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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is
Wrong verb form
was

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb is. Consider changing it.

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not changing,
In
Change preposition
On

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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nourth
Correct your spelling
north

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of
map
Correct article usage
the map

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farmland
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was

It seems that the verb were does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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removed and many cows
were traveled
Change the verb form
have traveled

The context of this sentence suggests that the verb were traveled should be in the present perfect form. Consider changing the verb form.

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another
Change preposition
to another

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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place
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, another
place
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

for example
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

near the post office there were erected a road that it connected some home to
main
Change the article
the main

It appears that the phrase main road does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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road,another striking change is that the circle
place
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

was built in
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the center
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Add an article
the center

The noun phrase center seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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center
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centre
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of some house
instead
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of
farmingland
Correct your spelling
farming land
farmland

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, the Garden used to be a green area with a lot of trees , but trees have been cut down , and a new home has been constructed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example, instead".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
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