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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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deficts
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depicts
deficits
 the use of money towards
Charity
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 by different
age
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group
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groups
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 from 1990 to 2010 in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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. As can be seen from the chart, as the
age
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 of
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the individual
an individual
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individual
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individuals
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is increasing
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increases
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, the percentage of
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charity
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charities
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also
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increase
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 gradually. In 1990, the
age
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 group of 18-25 Showed the lowest spending towards helping others. It increased sharply and reached above 30% in the
age
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 of 26-35.
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, the
middel
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middle
age
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 group Of 36-50 showed the highest Proportion in
charity
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 and rose significantly to
reached
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 out above 40%. In 1990٠ 52-65
as well as
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 above 65 had
the
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a
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 similar contribution by under 35%.
According to
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 the
charti
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chart
charts
 in 2010,
indicates
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there was
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upward
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an upward
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 trend as
age
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 increased. 57-65 had greater Proportion towards
Charity
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 as compared to 1990 by nearly 40% followed by 36-50,26-35 and 18-25 by approximately 35% , 25 and 5%. Above the
age
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65
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of 65
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 ,
Percentage
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the Percentage
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 of money declined gradually and Stayed at 35%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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