The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.
The bar graph represents data
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Brazil's economy based on five different categories in the year 2009, 2019 and 2029 respectively.
Overall
, the chart depicts investments from all
the
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five contributions
such
as Finance, Food Processing, Manufacturing, Tourism and Oil,Coal and gas.
According to
the data, Finance stands at the top of the figure with 30 to 40 per cent of
economy
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growth
whereas
Food processing and Manufacturing appear to be the least. Tourism and Oil, Coal,
Gas
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industry
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seem to be
consistant
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consistent
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much
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variations.
In contrast
, Manufacturing was the only industry that showed a significant drop in contribution to the Brazilian economy. That was from 20 to 5 per cent.
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Finance was the only sector that got leveled up in the year 2029.
Similarly
, Tourism was the one category that made a constant share
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the economic growth of Brazil in both 2019 and 2029.
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